English Name: Sally
Chinese Name:
胡静
Year: Senior 2
Class: 128
Title: Turn Rain
QQ: 1150881250
一位母亲 A mother.
一位孩子 A child.
一把雨伞 An umbrella.
拐来拐去 Turn right or turn left.
雨远离了孩子 The rain keeps away from the child.
却从妈妈的肩膀流了下来 It falls from the mother's shoulder.
Comments (From American voters):
"Short and very meaningful"
"Turn Rain is short but it has an element of mystery that makes it work as a poem. A lot of the contestants wrote about conflict- with their education, their mothers or their sense of themselves. Turn Rain hints at conflict and leaves the reader with a sort of universal experience."
"I liked the distillation of the child-mother relationship into such a simple action. It made the protection and sacrifice for the child very poignant and visceral. Some of the other entries described similar feelings, but felt too expositional."
"The student who wrote 'Turn Rain' managed to do what a lot of American college graduates still can't: conjure vivid imagery while showing, *not telling*, the relationship between a mother and child. The poem is clearly about love, but never once mentions the word. All of this in 24 words. Bravo."
(One voter did not leave a comment)
This is the second place winning submission. A poem written by Sally (胡静), a Senior 2 student from class 128.. Twenty nine American readers cast their votes for their first, second, and third favorite piece. Sally's "Turn Rain" earned 5 votes for first place, 3 for second, and 1 for third, earning it the number two spot in our competition. Congratulations Sally! Comments from the voters are at the bottom of the page.
